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UxieLover1994 Cuando la vida te da las herramientas, a construir motos libración — 06:36, 22 September 2011 (UTC)
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 How do we know it's name? Can you give us the link to the sorce?
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Source Bottom box. When you said you were the fun one on the lane, who was your competition? The mailbox? - Erry 07:06, 22 September 2011 (UTC)
- Okay. Gracias por la información! UxieLover1994 08:07, 22 September 2011 (UTC)
My Critique
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Eternal Nothingness XIII -  I'm not afraid of what the darkness holds now. Even if you do wrest control of my heart from me, even if you cast me into the deepest, darkest abyss, you'll never sway me from the one cause that pushes me to keep on fighting. Whatever the cost, I'm ready to pay it.
TALK - There's darkness within me... So what does that matter? I know I'm strong enough to hold it back. — 20:26, 22 September 2011 (UTC)
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 Looks like a great start so far, Erry. A few things first:
- We should only use screenshots if available to illustrate characters until and unless a render is available/getting an in-game render is possible. Images from the Spanish comic should be moved to a gallery if not purged from the page completely, because they do not illustrate the world itself, rather a particular character in the world, thus they are better suited on a character article's gallery. Note that there are HQ screenshots of Quasimodo holding Esmeralda from the TGS trailer on KHInsider.
- Be consistent when referring to the world's name in the article. What I mean by this is in the intro, you call it "La Cité des Cloches" in the intro and some of the article body, but in the trivia, you call it "City of Bells."
- You may want to revise the story so it sounds more like a story rather than a quick after-thought (it shouldn't sound like: "By the way, this happened, but there's nothing to say about it, but I'm putting it in anyways"). I've written an example, based around the translated TGS trailer that you may wish to use instead:
- "At some point during his visit to La Cité des Cloches, Riku approaches Quasimodo in the courtyard outside the cathedral. Quasimodo is carrying an unconscious Esmeralda in his arms, and when Riku asks where the Dream Eaters went, he says they went to the rooftop of the cathedral. After the Gargoyle is seen flying high above, Riku runs into the cathedral as Quasimodo states that he'll fight as well."
- Regarding the Spanish comic: Should we do an "Other Apperances" section mentioning everything relevant to it?
Other staffers are welcome to comment/offer their two cents. Once we get this article in good enough shape, I believe actually creating it would be a good idea.
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Erry - Ragnarok de Dies Irae.
TALK - Nascent Requiem ~ 20:40, 22 September 2011 (UTC)
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 I'd alter the Story section to be actually a story told but there is not much substance so far to actually put effort into it. On the topic of images, I am only using the comic images as place holders. Until we get proper (as in standing, like Neku's.)
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