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[http://images.khinsider.com/famitsu%20september%2021%202011/fami%20scan%205.jpg Source] Bottom box. {{User:Erry/Sig}} 07:06, 22 September 2011 (UTC) | [http://images.khinsider.com/famitsu%20september%2021%202011/fami%20scan%205.jpg Source] Bottom box. {{User:Erry/Sig}} 07:06, 22 September 2011 (UTC) | ||
:Okay. Gracias por la información! [[User:UxieLover1994|<font color="gold">Uxie</font>]]<small>[[User talk:UxieLover1994|<font color="gray">Lover</font>]]</small>[[User:UxieLover1994/Legado|<font color="red">1994</font>]] 08:07, 22 September 2011 (UTC) | :Okay. Gracias por la información! [[User:UxieLover1994|<font color="gold">Uxie</font>]]<small>[[User talk:UxieLover1994|<font color="gray">Lover</font>]]</small>[[User:UxieLover1994/Legado|<font color="red">1994</font>]] 08:07, 22 September 2011 (UTC) | ||
== My Critique == | |||
{{EO|time=20:26, 22 September 2011 (UTC)|talktext=Looks like a great start so far, Erry. A few things first: | |||
*We should only use screenshots if available to illustrate characters until and unless a render is available/getting an in-game render is possible. Images from the Spanish comic should be moved to a gallery if not purged from the page completely, because they do not illustrate the world itself, rather a particular character in the world, thus they are better suited on a character article's gallery. Note that there are HQ screenshots of Quasimodo holding Esmeralda from the TGS trailer on KHInsider. | |||
*Be consistent when referring to the world's name in the article. What I mean by this is in the intro, you call it "La Cité des Cloches" in the intro and some of the article body, but in the trivia, you call it "City of Bells." | |||
*You may want to revise the story so it sounds more like a story rather than a quick after-thought (it shouldn't sound like: "By the way, this happened, but there's nothing to say about it, but I'm putting it in anyways"). I've written an example, based around the translated TGS trailer that you may wish to use instead: | |||
**"At some point during his visit to La Cité des Cloches, Riku approaches Quasimodo in the courtyard outside the cathedral. Quasimodo is carrying an unconscious Esmeralda in his arms, and when Riku asks where the Dream Eaters went, he says they went to the rooftop of the cathedral. After the Gargoyle is seen flying high above, Riku runs into the cathedral as Quasimodo states that he'll fight as well." | |||
*About the color of the ''KH3D'' template: Not to keen on such a dark color scheme. We might want to find one that works better and is closer to the "game colors." | |||
*Regarding the Spanish comic: Should we do an "Other Apperances" section mentioning everything relevant to it? | |||
Other staffers are welcome to comment/offer their two cents. Once we get this article in good enough shape, I believe actually creating it would be a good idea.}} |
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Source Bottom box. Grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, the courage to change the things I cannot accept, and the wisdom to hide the bodies of those I had to kill because they pissed me off. - Erry 07:06, 22 September 2011 (UTC)
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